Writing tips please help? - sample of welcome notes to guest
I write now, and have been for some time, especially poetry, but still ideas for stories and ideas for a novel. I wonder, to help you when all my criticism is allowed, because they need help.
- Amanda in the large kitchen, and he gasped for air as he fell. In their eyes, the kitchen was in ruins. Pots and pans on the floor, dry food on the stove, and a clear, sticky substance like syrup all covered. On the table lay a note that was apparently intended to read it, the place where he thought it was the only place to see the rooms clean, as if the note had been created by the Goo. He approached the paper folded. She stopped and I knew that I had done. The document CAStationery, which I had bought her boyfriend a month ago. She knew that the paper was conceived, because the model itself. They have suffered a bad time and he finally go into hiding, but he had found.
This is not exactly nothing, just something I did as a sample. Can someone help me, I want to know if it's good if they do not work, what I need. anything that can help me. Moreover, in sufficient detail that I never know w = how to decide what is sufficient detail and what is too little. All tips are welcome.
Thank you!
Tuesday, February 16, 2010
Sample Of Welcome Notes To Guest Writing Tips Please Help?
3 comments:
It would be nice if you wrote something else, like a page or more. I would like to discuss in depth and work out what I think their strengths and weaknesses.
In general, however, some stereotypes are used, (he was arrested, was in ruins before their eyes can see) that you know have a good job of showing rather than telling (which describes the kitchen in ruins), which is not much to see is Yahoo! A. It would be interesting to see some of his poems. That's where I am wrong.
I think you have a very poetic way of writing. It is a site I publish my stories: Booksie appeal. You can after your story and get lots of comments. Everyone is really great support. Everyone is the same reason. For someone to be read, and read other peoples.
But I think I might be a great writer. He has style. ;)
I think it was very good, but the work on the structure of your sentence, it is easy to read. The game with the syntax, with long and short sentences as well. Has it not broken into sentences and it disrupts the flow of writing.
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